Hello my name is sally. Today, I would like to tell you about the three things
that I know to be true.
First of all, I want to tell you about my younger brother.
I have 1younger brother. I usually fight with my brother, but mostly, we get along very well.
He is very cute and handsome. I love my brother.
But sometimes, he bothers me so I can't participate in my work.
It's okay, becuase he is kind and good boy.
Secondly, I want to tell you about
'Korea divided in two'.
'Korea divided in two'.
Korea had 6.25 war in 1950 year,
so all country helped us.
so all country helped us.
But it divided into two parts.
South Korea and North Korea.
South Korea and North Korea.
Now, we must be one so that Korea
could be strong and develop.
Lastly, I want to tell you about Korea's president.
Korea's president is Meoung-Park Lee.
He took care of Korea well.
So, Korea became strong.
He took care of Korea well.
So, Korea became strong.
We all need to try hard and try to make Korea develop.
I will finish my story about three things
that I know to be true. Thank you for listening.
that I know to be true. Thank you for listening.
Bye! Bye! ^^
Your essay is little bit short but you divided paragraph well
ReplyDeleteI think the pictures match well with your writing.^^
ReplyDeleteHi Sowon:) I enjoyed your work. There are some advices I want to give you about your writing. First, I want you to elaborate more. Your paragraphs are interesting, but they are somewhat short. Try to add more details. Another thing is that I want you to try to greate a good introduction and conclusion. A good introduction should draw the readers' attention and briefly introduce what you are going to talk about, and a good conclusion should neatly sum up the context and present a line of your final thought. I hope to see your next work as well. Keep up the good work:)
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ReplyDeleteHi- Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us. The post is short however so please try to develop your ideas in each paragraph by thinking about the 5 w's (who, what etc). The intro/conclusion also need to be more detailed.
ReplyDeleteThe pictures and presentation is well-done.