Have you heard about "Joseph Kony" who kidnapped children and made them kill
their own parents? Nowadays it is very popular and everyone is looking for a
way to solve that problem. An organization called "invisible children" made a video
to make Joseph Kony popular and to capture Joseph Kony. He is in Africa and is on the most wanted list with the ICC. There are a lot of people who agree that videos
or disagree that video. I agree with the video the make Joseph Kony popular and famous.
To start with, the video “Kony 2012” is the fastest way to make Joseph Kony popular and famous and if Joseph Kony becomes popular and famous to people, we can help children who kidnapped by Joseph Kony.
Morover, we can stop Joseph Kony. Everyone can see that video if they have computer. So, it will be popular and Kony will be arrested!!!
However, if there is somebody who disagree with video, we need to try to make the other ways to solve that problem. Or try another things that we think it will be
Very helpful to arrest Joseph Kony popular or arrest Joseph Kony to stop kidnapping children so that we can save our children and help them to be released our children.
But most of people will agree with making video to make Joseph Kony popular and famous. And I think it’s the best way to make Joseph Kony more popular.
Therefore, we need to see the video "Kony 2012" and know who Joseph Kony is and try
to make our own decision about do we agree or disagree to make Joseph Kony to be
popular as a video. And ofcourse I will make my own decision too.
Hi... This is 수연.. I like how you wrote your introduction about Kony. I think it would be better if you just include the pictures on it. Good Job!!!!!
ReplyDeleteGood job with the introduction and information about Kony. You should include the "Kony 2012" video as well as some pictures.
ReplyDeleteThe body of your essay is too short. It is great you included opposing arguments and your rebuttal but you need to develop your own reasons further. Keep up the good work!